Structure Analysis

Thesis Statement

In the opening paragraph [Sec. #1], the last two sentences highlighted in the following quotes would be considered as the thesis statement for two reasons. First and foremost, they contain words like troop", "shell craters, indicating that bees' familiar fields had become battlefields for Russian and Ukrainian, which will be mentioned throughout the essay. Furthermore, the sentence And then they flew home implies that the beekeeper's homeland was in danger, which leaves a foreshadowing for the beekeeper's personal stories in the following paragraphs.

BOHDANIVKA,Ukraine -- By the time the weather warmed after a cold spring, the fieldof sunflowers where for decades Petro Fedorovych's bees would gather nectar"nectar" - a sweet liquid produced by flowers and collected by bees and other insects. to make their amber honey were mostly unplanted and abandoned. ► The war had crept across the eastern Ukrainian steppe after Russia's invasion in February. The city of Sievierodonetsk fell, then Lysychansk. The front lines moved until the incessant thuds and bangs of artillery arrived around the beekeeper's small village, Bohdanivka, with the heat. ► But still his bees left their hives just as they had every summer. Petro Fedorovych, 71, watched them fly beyond their familiar fields. They flew toward the roads and shell craters, closer and closer to the front line where Russian and Ukrainian troops were killing one another with gins, grenades"grenade" - a small bomb thrown by hand or shot from a gun. and rockets. ► And then they flew home.

Essay Outline

[Sec. #2] - Petro Fedorovych's and other Ukrainians' decision when the war began.

At the beginning of this section, it indicates that owing to the war, some people are forced to leave their hometowns. Yet, without sufficient resources to survive and nowhere to go, other people chose to stay. But many have stayed, sheltering in basements and elsewhere, resolute in their decision to brave the onslaught for a litany of reasons: nowhere else to go, no money, disabled family members, pro-Russian sentiments. The rest of the passage further elaborates on Petro Fedorovych's decision after the war took place, who determined to stay with his house and wife. The reason is obvious in the key sentence: It was a world unto itself, where even the destruction slowly encroaching felt more favorable than the unknown in the cities and towns beyond Russian artillery range. In his words: I built this house with my hands, I will never leave, which also implies his emotion toward his homeland.

[Sec. #3] - Current situations of Bohdanivka under the war

Several specific phrases show the main idea of this paragraph. For instance, the phrases brutal methodology, turn villages like Bohdanivka into graveyards almost overnight and chewing up virtually everything in their path shows that the current situation in Ukraine was in danger. Even Bohdanivka, a small village in Ukraine, cannot prevent suffering from such serious damage.

[Sec. #4] - The meaning of war to Petro Fedorovych & His life after leaving the military.

The key phrase Russia's invasion is neither an invasion nor a war; it is just "it." The war did not begin, "it began" can best summarize Petro Fedorovych's viewpoint on wars in the first paragraph. Moreover, the phrase is consistent with the last section, which also depicts the scene of war.

On the other hand, the second part of this paragraph continues Petro Fedorovych's life after serving in the Soviet Army, including how he met his wife and built his own house in tranquility. Yet, in the last sentence They were surrounded by tranquil fields and near a reservoir where the Ukrainian Army has now placed troops and vehicles., it is consistent with [Sec. #3] and the following paragraphs.

[Sec. #5] - The meaning of bees to Petro Fedorovych's life.

At the beginning of the section, some works made by Petro Fedorovych were mentioned, like blue-painted wooden hives. To move on, the writer talked about the emotional connection between bees and Petro Fedorovych. For him, keeping bees was a way to remember his father. The bees, he reckoned, were a way for his father to adjust to civilian life and leave that war behind when he started beekeeping in the 1950s.

[Sec. #6] - The lose and difference of bees during the war.

Due to the war, Bohdanivka, a village that used to be tranquil, now becomes noisier than ever before. As a result, bees are more easily getting irritated. "The bees became different," he said, referring to the shelling. "Ira won't go in the garden, they won't give her a minutes rest. It's because of the noise." Moreover, at the beginning of the paragraph, it indicates that the bee population weas decreasing and hardly recovered.

[Sec. #7] - An unexpected gain of honey in this season.

At the beginning of this section, Petro Fedorovych indicated that he originally did not anticipate the return of honey for two reasons. First of all, sunflowers in the frontline had been planted earlier this year. Consequently, he expected that most bees were already drawn there. Moreover, many beekeepers dwelling in nearby areas have fled, making remaining beekeepers share fewer notes of keeping bees this year.

Coherence & Cohesion

[Sec. #2]

Coherence

Para #1 - Since the first section mostly focused on wars in Ukrainian and the scenes of bees, the second section further added related information about the war. That is, the Ukrainians' decisions after the war erupted. Some people chose to leave for saving their life Millions of Ukrainians have fled their homes since the war began more than six months ago. Other people chose to stay: But many have stayed, sheltering in basements and elsewhere, resolute in their decision to brave the onslaught......
Para #1 - The word home in the sentence But Petro Fedorovych's decision to remain at his house with his bees and his wife, Ira, and their goat, Flower, was as simple as it gets: It was their home. is consistent with the sententenceAnd then they flew home. in [Sec. #1]. Both sentences focus on the word home.

Cohesion

Para #1 - In the sentence But Petro Fedorovych's decision to remain at his house with his bees and his wife, Ira, and their goat, Flower, was as simple at it gets: It was their home., the first "it" means "his decision", while the second "it " means, in my viewpoint, "everything in house", which are usages of pronounces.
Para #1 - In the sentences But many have stayed, sheltering in basements and elsewhere, resolute as well as But Petro Fedorovych's decision to remain at his house with his bees and his wife, Ira, and their goat, Flower, was as simple at it gets: It was their home., the use of the conjunction "but" showed the contract between Petro's and others decisions after the war.

[Sec. #3]

Coherence

Para #1 - The first sentence All wars are terrible, but the war in Ukraine stands out because of its brutal methodology. further elaborates on the topic of the Russia-Ukraine war. It implies how perilous the current situation is for residents.
Para #1 - Similarly, the sentence Artillery can turn villages like Bohdanivka into graveyards almost overnight. is also consistent with some keywords like destruction and Russian artillery from the former section.

Cohesion

Para #1 - In the sentence All wars are terrible, but the war in Ukraine stands out because of its brutal methodology., its brutal methodology refers to the Russian army's action when invading Ukraine, which is further elaborated in the next sentence.
Para #1 - The pronounce "they" in the sentence Bohdanivka, with a population of around 150 people, lies between where Russian troops are now, and where they want to go refers to Russian troops, which helps connect with the former sentence If Russian troops want to advance, they will do so slowly, chewing up virtually everything in their path with so much ordnance that uninterrupted moments of silence make a stomach-tightening anxiety a complement to the next horror.

[Sec. #4]

Coherence

Para #1 - From the phrase To Petro Fedorovych, we can learn that this paragraph is going to talk about Petro's opinion toward the war and some of his personal story.
Para #2 - The use of linkers "after" in the sentence After he left the military, he moved to Bohdanivka in 1972, where he worked long hours as a veterinarian on a collective dairy farm. Ira was a nurse in the nearby city of what was then called Artemivsk, now Bakhmut. gives a transition from the focus on the military in the former paragraph to the topic of Petro's life with his family.

Cohesion

Para #1 - The pronounce it repeats in the paragraph, which stresses some keywords in the paragraph. For instance, the sentence Russia's invasion is neither an invasion nor a war; it is just "it., it refers to Russia's invasion.
Para #2 - The pronounce They, repeating throughout the whole paragraph, refers to Petro Fedorovych and his wife, Ira, which shows the timeline of events that connects different sentences.

[Sec. #5]

Coherence

Para #1 - By stating For his bees at the beginning of the sentence, the author moved the topic to the surroundings where bees lived, Petro Fedorovych's backyard.
Para #2 - After introducing the place where the bees lived and their surroundings, from the first sentence of this paragraph Bees have been a part of Petro Fedorovych's life since he was a child in what is now western Russia., the topic moves on to the emotional bond between his bees and he.

Cohesion

Para #1 - their habitants in the sentence he built blue-painted wooden hives that litter his backyard like beacons among the tall grass, their inhabitants furiously commuting among the chickens, a dilapidated white Volga sedan and clusters of phacelia, viper's bugloss and mustard plants. refer to the bees that Petro kept, which is the usage of synonyms/ paraphrasing.
Para #2 - In the sentence The bees, he reckoned, were a way for his father to adjust to civilian life and leave that war behind when he started beekeeping in the 1950s., that war refers to World War II mentioned in the former sentence, which is the usage of synonyms/ paraphrasing.

[Sec. #6]

Coherence

Para #1 - At the beginning of the paragraph, by saying Now another war was approaching, the writer made a transition from the sentence in the last paragraph The bees, he reckoned, were a way for his father to adjust to civilian life and leave that war behind when he started beekeeping in the 1950s. to change the focus to the current situation.
Para #2 - - The keywords with similar meanings like silence, solitude, and quiet appear in the paragraph, showing not only how the original the atmosphere of the village is but also emphasizing that There is no more silence in Bohdanivka.

Cohesion

Para #1 - In the sentence ......and the beekeeper has a small smoker filled with burning wood that he frequently uses to calm the insects., the insects here refer to the bees, which is the usage of synonyms/paraphrasing.
Para #1 - In the two sentences Ira won't go in the garden, they won't give her a minutes rest. It's because of the noise., they refers to the bees, while It refers to the former sentence that bees would attack Ira if she entered the garden.

[Sec. #7]

Coherence

Para #1 - The key phrase a good haul in the sentence It was a good haul by any season's standard. points out the main idea of the paragraph that despite the war, Petro still gained an unexpected return of honey.
Para #1 - Another key phrase rich harvest is also consistent with the main topic of this section.

Cohesion

Para #1 - In the sentence It was a good haul by any season's standard., It refers to the event that the bees returned with roughly 650 pounds of honey, which is the usage of Pronouns and connects these two sentences.
Para #1 - The writer uses different words to substitute for the beekeeper's name, which can be seen in the sentences But still, even with the shriek of rockets overhead, the beekeeper tended to some of his last honey frames of the season. He scraped the wax, placed the frames in the centrifuge and spun, until the rich harvest drained to the bottom and, finally, into a glass cup. Both he and the beekeeper are refers to Petro Fedorovych, which is the usage of Pronouns.

[Sec. #8]

Coherence

Para #1 - The sentence But now, in his twilight, there was no one to take up his life's work and to take care of the bees that he would rather die for than abandon. shows the main two ideas of this section. First of all, it implies none of Petro Fedorovych's offspring was going to take over his business of being a beekeeper, which can be seen throughout the two paragraphs. Secondly, it indicates the effort that Petro Fedorovych had made to take care of those bees and treated them seriously as a part of his life.
Para #2 - The sentence Dad won't leave behind his children is consistent with the sentence in the former paragraph But now, in his twilight, there was no one to take up his life's work and to take care of the bees that he would rather die for than abandon., which indicates that as long as Petro Fedorovych is alive, he will keep taking care of his bees.

Cohesion

Para #1 - In the two sentences But now, in his twilight, there was no one to take up his life's work and to take care of the bees that he would rather die for than abandon. and Of course, Dad dreams that someone in the family will inherit this trade, but so far the grandkids are growing up" and showing little interest......, both two phrases take up his life's work and inherit this trade refer to inheriting Petro Fedorovych's beekeeper's career. It is the use of synonyms/ paraphrasing, which uses different words to describe the same concepts.
Para #2 - In the two sentences Lilia has tried again and again to get her parents to leave Bohdanivka, but to no avail. and But they are taking them out. And me, however I approach this topic, they won't agree., this topic refers to Lilla's thought to take her parents out of their homeland, which connects these sentences and lets readers focus on the topic.

Take-home Message

The last section of the entire essay (see Sec. #8) implies Petro Fedorovych's determination to be a beekeeper. In reality, most of his grandkids showed no interest in keeping bees and had already left their hometown. In contrast, Petro Fedorovych showed no approval of leaving there. To him, bees, a way to remember his father, had already been regarded as his own son. After all, last but not least, no matter how perilous the situations were, Petro Fedorovych would endeavor to beekeeping and take care of his beloved sons, the frontline bees, instead of abandoning them.

Sunflower honey was still his favorite after decades of beekeeping. But now, in his twilight, there was no one to take up his life's work and to take care of the bees that he would rather die for than abandon. ► "Of course, Dad dreams that someone in the family will inherit this trade, but so far the grandkids are growing up" and showing little interest, said Lilia, the family's youngest daughter, sitting in a restaurant hundreds of miles away in Kyiv, the Ukrainian capital.

Lilia has watched in fear as the war comes closer to her parents' home. A nurse like her mother, Lilia sells honey her father mails to the neighbors; a pound costs roughly a dollar. Two years ago, Lilia, 45, bought her father a new beekeeper suit, decorated with newspaper front pages, off the Internet. ► Lilia has tried again and again to get her parents to leave Bohdanivka, but to no avail. ► "It especially hurts when our friends and acquaintances take their parents away," she said."But they are taking them out. And me, however I approach this topic, they won't agree."►"Dad won't leave behind his children," she added, speaking of the bees. His other children had left home long ago.